I wrote a rap song about my country, what do you think?

I'm sick of havin' this ****


and who has ever predicted


that someday we'd solve the conflict


between us and all the Arabics


I want all the civilians to insist on our lands


instead of sittin' and keep crossin' their hands


and when "The Peace" should finally come


I'm tired of looking for a dome


'cause all the Kassams follow me


it's not the way that I want it to be


we are not secure as long as Gaza exists


that's why we see our future through the mist


we have to fight against them tooth and nail


do or die, it's strictly forbidden us to fail


parents enlist their son into the Army to protect


while they grit their teeth, watch TV and so upset


recently we've become a target for all these rockets


I'm Pondering over that,is our tranquility hard to get


people's blood sheds for nothing it's hard to digest


it's a pang like a knife pierces deeply into my chest

I wrote a rap song about my country, what do you think?
thats sick, u owned it. im not kidding it was so good. keep up the good work
Reply:Wow, That realy sucks. Try not to be so deep, write about what you realy know.
Reply:I wasn't all that inspired by your efforts, but you're not horrible. Keep plugging away.
Reply:us and all the arabics! Edumacated
Reply:It's okay. Not the greatest. not the worst.